Genre: Photograph
Outline: #1.
This photograph is of Vietnam War Protestors. It is in black and white and in the center of the image is a sign with the words: “END THE WAR IN INOCHINA VIETNAM NOW” painted on it. A young man, probably in his early twenties, is holding up the sign. Linking arms with him are two men of around the same age. All three men’s mouths are open, possibly in the midst of shouting. In the foreground of the image are more protestors, but only their heads are showing. In the corner, barely visible, is an American flag.
Purpose: The main purpose of this photograph is to show protestors of the Vietnam War. Based on the photo itself, the photographer seems unbiased and was simply capturing a moment. It also shows how angry and loud these people were. The linked arm’s represents the unity between them.
Audience: The audience was and is all American’s. An anti-war American would appreciate this photo more than someone who felt differently, but it is intended for both sides to see.
Stance: As mentioned above the photographer appears to be unbiased on the subject of the Vietnam War and of the protestors. The people in the photo themselves, however, are not so unbiased. They are obviously anti-war, and are quite loud and bold about this stance.
Media: The media of this is version of the photograph is digital, but at one time I am sure it was in print, perhaps in a magazine or newspaper.
Ethos: I do not know who the original publisher or who the original photographer were. Therefore I am unsure of the credibility of this photo. I am going to assume it is from a credible source.
Logos: The photo features three men in the foreground of the picture, they all appear to be shouting and their arms are linked together. In the background are what appears to be hundreds of more people who also appear to be shouting. This depicts the protestors as a unified group of people. The sign in the middle of them that states, “END THE WAR IN INDOCHINA VIETNMAN NOW” shows exactly what is unifying them. This photograph is simply telling the truth of the matter. This is what the protestors were against, and this how they showed it.
Pathos: The description of the photograph under logos is what makes this piece so strong. The determination of the protestors is spilling from this photo. Their heads are held high, they appear to be yelling, their arms are linked, etc. They are a determined and angry group of people and that is clearly shown in the photo.
Thesis:
This photograph is of Vietnam War Protestors. It is in black and white and in the center of the image is a sign with the words: “END THE WAR IN INOCHINA VIETNAM NOW” painted on it. A young man, probably in his early twenties, is holding up the sign. Linking arms with him are two men of around the same age. All three men’s mouths are open, possibly in the midst of shouting. In the foreground of the image are more protestors, but only their heads are showing. In the corner, barely visible, is an American flag. The photographer of this photo did a very good job of showing the unity, and the power behind the Vietnam War protestors. Perhaps also the photographer supported these protestors, in which case he does a very good job of that too.
Evidence:
i. The unity of these protestors is shown in their linked arms. The linked arms continue out of the edges of the photograph, giving it the feeling that they continue on.
ii. Power is clearly shown in this photograph. The photographer captured the protestors with their heads held high, in the midst of their chant. The three men take up most of the photo, making them appear larger than those behind them. This also makes it seem as though the crowd continues on for miles. The numbers in themselves represent power.
iii. The fact that the sign, with the words, “End the war in Indochina Vietnam now” is center of the photo, shows that the photographer was trying to capture what was motivating these protestors. By capturing this he was in a way supporting their cause.
Conclusion:
It is the linked arms, the faces in the midst of chanting, the vast amount of people, the placement of these people in the photograph, and the sign in the center of it all. The photographer made sure to capture these specific elements in order to creature a clear purpose. That purpose is to show the power and the unity behind the Vietnam War protestors. It is also to support the protestors themselves.
Reviewer: Vic-toria Cook
ReplyDeleteEnglish 1050: Thought and Writing
Project #2 Analysis & Argument
Peer Review
Please respond to two of your peers’ rough drafts that are posted on their blogs. You should choose the two students whose names fall right after yours alphabetically (see my blog). You should address the following items as you respond to each peer:
• Purpose: Is the thesis statement clear, assertive, and easily identifiable? If yes, identify the thesis statement. If not, what suggestions for improvement can you give?
The thesis is a little wordy. Its clear what you are trying to say but the thesis should just include who the arthor is was his argument successful or not and why. Save all the supporting details for your outline.
• Detail/Development: Are there 3-5 pieces of evidence that support the thesis statement? Is each piece of evidence fully developed and fleshed out? Give a suggestion for improvement.
There was 3-5 pieces of evidence in the outline but the evidence wasn’t supported b any facts ( there was no a b or c ) put some of the supporting evidence that was in your thesis statement and put it in your outline.
• Organization/Coherence: Is the essay organized in a clear way? Is the argument plausible and well supported? Why do or don't you think so?
Your essay is organized and well supported just needs to be expanded
• Audience/Stance (Tone and Voice): Are you persuaded by the argument/analysis made in this essay? What contributes to this for you? Be specific. Are the tone and voice appropriate?
I am persuaded by the tone of voice. I can clearly picture what the photograph looks like by your description of it. The tone is appropriate.
• Language/Conventions: Note any repeated errors in the text. Expanding Your
Yes you clearly state over and over that this photo was about Vietnam and people are sad.
Purpose: Is the thesis statement clear, assertive, and easily identifiable? If yes, identify the thesis statement. If not, what suggestions for improvement can you give?
ReplyDeleteThe photographer of this photo did a very good job of showing the unity, and the power behind the Vietnam War protestors. Perhaps also the photographer supported these protestors, in which case he does a very good job of that too.
Good thesis that you can have all your evidence back up!
Detail/Development: Are there 3-5 pieces of evidence that support the thesis statement? Is each piece of evidence fully developed and fleshed out? Give a suggestion for improvement.
Your evidence is great with connecting to your thesis and helping to describe the general photograph. Make sure that you will have enough to write about though and things don’t start to repeat. Make sure to add different elements into your body paragraph such as emotional appeal and such!
Organization/Coherence: Is the essay organized in a clear way? Is the argument plausible and well supported? Why do or don't you think so?
This essay is so far organized in a pretty coherent way. Each roman numeral is a different part of the picture and explains it in different ways. Make sure to expand though, which I’m sure you will!
Audience/Stance (Tone and Voice): Are you persuaded by the argument/analysis made in this essay? What contributes to this for you? Be specific. Are the tone and voice appropriate?
The argument made in this essay is very descriptive and makes me feel as though I can actually see the photo. That’s probably the biggest thing with this outline so far, it’s very detailed and organized. The tone is appropriate to this piece which is basically trying to show and explain the picture and its background.
Language/Conventions: Note any repeated errors in the text.
Everything looks pretty good!